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post Mar 14 2011, 03:23 PM
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Hey guys here is a new space art turning much towards real stuff but still with my nebula painting touch, well hoping so, lol!! Could you let me know your opinion!!?? This is probably my last one for a little while, I'd like to go deeper into Matte painting...
Cheers for your help!




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post Mar 14 2011, 06:06 PM
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It's really beautiful and the composition works really well !
I think the great Planet in the foreground haven't a good quality. Maybe the background is really detailed , too much for this lighthing ?!





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post Mar 14 2011, 11:22 PM
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Looks pretty good, a classic tongue.gif

I'd say the nebula looks a bit too randomly scattered. There's just "bits" of it here and there with no real form. A larger or more singular nebula would look better than a scattering of little ones. That doesn't mean the whole nebula has to be just as bright which would make a huge distraction, one only just noticeable that flares up in some areas but is still noticeably connected throughout the scene would help the composition of details beyond the planets.

The atmospher eon the closest planet could probably be narrower too, the air-line around Earthlike planets can be surprisingly narrow. There's nothing wrong with a thick glow if a hazy, dreamy effect is wanted. But for normal space scenes it's usually done by amateurs and some people who have looked at space art long enough (like me) might connect a thick atmosphere edge with beginner style work (even I did that on my earlier planets) I think you'll find the planet actually "feels" bigger with a thinner atmosphere glow too cool.gif




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post Mar 15 2011, 05:59 AM
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QUOTE (O21 @ Mar 14 2011, 07:06 PM) *
It's really beautiful and the composition works really well !
I think the great Planet in the foreground haven't a good quality. Maybe the background is really detailed , too much for this lighthing ?!


Hum not sure about your remark on quality it was a 8000px by 8000px so I think it's big enough, but I do agree with your comment about the background, yeah there are too many and scattered details just like prettyboy pointed out as well!




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post Mar 15 2011, 09:08 AM
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Priteeboy has some good points. My main problem with it is how disjointed the nebulae feels. I would work on that first, then maybe fix the planet's atmosphere. Also the lens flare feels a little tacky...

But overall a nice composition, and great textures on the planet.




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post Mar 15 2011, 09:48 AM
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Thx a lot priteeboy and Alastair, you really pointed out what bugged me in my artwork but I was too much into it to have sufficient self-analysis to find out the problem. The nebula is indeed too much scattered and even too obvious which consequently reduce the sensation of deepness with the flare.
I'll reduce as well the atmosphere a little bit.
Thx mates for your help!




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post Mar 17 2011, 08:38 PM
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Somehow I cannot see the image, I see this: [attachment=409:After_LifeV2.jpg] but I cannot click it! What can I do to see it?
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post Mar 17 2011, 08:45 PM
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QUOTE (Glympus @ Mar 17 2011, 09:38 PM) *
Somehow I cannot see the image, I see this: [attachment=409:After_LifeV2.jpg] but I cannot click it! What can I do to see it?


Dont worry I'm reuploading an edited version according to what O-21, Priteeboy and SD pointed out.

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post Mar 17 2011, 09:43 PM
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much better really like the new lens flare too.




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post Mar 18 2011, 06:57 PM
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Nice image so far Shue. A thing or two that bother me are:

1. I would remove the planet on the right since it distracts the viewers eyes now. You have nice flow from the biggest planet to the sun and this planet breaks it.
2. I would make the starfield a bit more busy to make the picture a bit more dynamic. This would also require a bit more subtle nebula details.
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post Mar 18 2011, 07:17 PM
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QUOTE (aRchAng3lZz @ Mar 18 2011, 07:57 PM) *
Nice image so far Shue. A thing or two that bother me are:

1. I would remove the planet on the right since it distracts the viewers eyes now. You have nice flow from the biggest planet to the sun and this planet breaks it.
2. I would make the starfield a bit more busy to make the picture a bit more dynamic. This would also require a bit more subtle nebula details.


Thanks a lot mate for your feedback. I think you're quite right, maybe I could try a different spot for the planet that bugs you, more into the focal in order not to break the flow as you say.
As regards my nebula, absolutely you're correct, I even think it sucks...I'll completely redo it and put some more stars indeed.
Thx a lot dude, I'm not safistied with it yet.




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