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   Kilerden
post Oct 21 2011, 05:09 PM
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Good-evening,

Would somebody be so kind to give this painting a proper critique? smile.gif
I'm trying to get good at it, but I've done this one in about <6 hours I think.. So I guess I could use some help tongue.gif

I think the right Island that's sticking out is a bit weird. (too little details?) and the composition goes to much to the right. (more framing or something like that on the top right corner???)

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Thanks in advanced for any replies smile.gif I'm very interested in what you think about it.




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post Oct 25 2011, 11:03 AM
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The style and individual details are pretty good (although the foreground trees do feel a little choppy, whereas everything else is very smooth which feels a little odd).

Other than that the piece lacks a strong point of interest, and your composition feels a little unbalanced.




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post Oct 31 2011, 01:47 AM
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I'm probably late, but I would say the foreground trees need a higher contrast. The shadowed parts of dense foliage can be surprisingly dark, plus it will help establish more depth too - softer contrasts are fine for far away stuff but up close shadows need to be darker and highlights need to be brighter wink.gif

Maybe one tree that's elevated above the rest on a series of trunks and branches poking through the canopy would look nice too.




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post Oct 31 2011, 08:11 AM
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It's never too late tongue.gif

But what is a good way to paint leaves, I got a little lazy there and used a rock texture to create them. There has to be an good way I guess. Haven't really looked for a tutorial yet.




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post Oct 31 2011, 02:13 PM
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Looks good. Quite nice color study to be honest. The picture itself lacks a good focal point. Maybe add something on the island to draw the eyes on it and make the rest of the image to lead your eyes to the focal (editing the formation of the foreground leaves might help a lot in that regard)
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post Oct 31 2011, 10:33 PM
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Did a quick sketch for the new Foreground.



What do you guys think?

I'll also add some flowers in the FG to add more colour. (and move that island)




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post Oct 31 2011, 11:07 PM
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looks like it should work better. the flowers might be nice, but watch out with them, the bright sparks of colour might be overly distracting.




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Looks much better man. Now if you move the island a bit closer and a bit to the right it will be even better (of course make it a bit bigger too tongue.gif) And you can balance the rest with some smaller rocks and islands scattered around the water and near the island smile.gif
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post Nov 1 2011, 08:26 AM
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Thanks guys, I hope i can finish the piece tonight biggrin.gif

I'm also starting on a new piece. Thumbnail sketch / lineart. Thought I'd show it to you before I'm working it out. smile.gif

(And can one of the moderators change my topic title to something more general. So I can post all stuff here instead of making thousands topics? tongue.gif Thank you in advance)




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post Nov 1 2011, 12:28 PM
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The sketch looks nice. I am waiting to see what will you do with it tongue.gif
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post Nov 1 2011, 11:56 PM
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So this is where I am now:


I flipped the image, looks better then HERE. And the island looks like a crocodile!

But how do you make proper tree's?! They are killing me!!! tongue.gif




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post Nov 9 2011, 10:28 PM
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I'm calling this project closed tongue.gif




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Hahah biggrin.gif
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post Nov 17 2011, 05:30 AM
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Don't be afraid to add and experiment with textures. I think that is what would be next with this piece, then further refining. Overall though it looks nice.
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post Nov 26 2011, 11:25 PM
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I agree with Kaioshen, you should play with textures too - like some smart guy once said - now the real work starts smile.gif! This is where you need to bush yourself further and you will see better results. I like overall mood and i see how much potential this work has.




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   Kilerden
post Nov 27 2011, 07:08 PM
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Thanks for the comments, I'll try it with textures when I get more time on my hands tongue.gif




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the ami, I love my words are nothing to feel what I feel at seeing these I congratulate DP darksmile.png





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