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post Jun 1 2009, 08:20 PM
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Made as a wallpaper pack. Any tips on improvement would be great. ohmy.gif
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post Jun 1 2009, 09:32 PM
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Good work. There are some problems with the lighting. If the sun was at that position, hardly any light would show on the planet because basically the planet is in front of the sun. There would be a crescent of light showing. Keep it up mate smile.gif




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post Jun 2 2009, 01:32 PM
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Look out for a deep critique from me over at dA wink.gif




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post Jun 3 2009, 01:09 AM
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post Jun 3 2009, 09:41 AM
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I like the fact that you've put the star at the bottom of the planet, that gives a nice twist but it seems like the composition is now a bit too symmetrical. What I would suggest is adding a moon or something of the likes in either the top left or right corner. Also the star itself could be a bit more aggressive, perhaps add a hint of a solar flare? Or a black spot on the left of the star hinting another planet far far away? To me this looks like a good setup but not a finished piece, if possible I'd keep doodling away in it =)




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post Jun 5 2009, 01:17 PM
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its a little plain and what has already been said about the lighting.




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post Jun 5 2009, 01:48 PM
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Stretched satellite photo, no clouds, bad lightning, extremely boring obvious soft brushing for the space dust, bad starfield, dark vertical line at the left, the sun looks nice.
If you are serious about space art, read , read and read some more, then practice, and dont slap things together, unless you want to contribute to trashing space art.
Sorry dude.




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   Kaioshen
post Jun 5 2009, 05:05 PM
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Damn ed, ease up man. We all started out somewhere right? If you want to give some crits than give them, there's no sense in posting that, it only discourages people away.

I would suggest looking at some art by greg martin and other top artists in the space art genre and see what they are doing. Study and learn how they achieved a certain look, then go back and try it for yourself. Also, don't be discouraged by your results, everything takes time to get used to and understand how it works. Also, read some tutorials too, there are some really good ones out there that would really help you.

Good luck
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post Jun 5 2009, 06:52 PM
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QUOTE (Kaioshen @ Jun 5 2009, 12:05 PM) *
Damn ed, ease up man. We all started out somewhere right? If you want to give some crits than give them, there's no sense in posting that, it only discourages people away.

I would suggest looking at some art by greg martin and other top artists in the space art genre and see what they are doing. Study and learn how they achieved a certain look, then go back and try it for yourself. Also, don't be discouraged by your results, everything takes time to get used to and understand how it works. Also, read some tutorials too, there are some really good ones out there that would really help you.

Good luck


Yeah maybe too hard man but I recently had several discussions about space art being a slapped together genre with no artistic value at all and that is because everywhere its plagued with stuff like that, so there is a reason for that kind of thinking. I dislike people throwing things together and calling it space art, and building up the disrespect for it, too many pre made sources out there if you ask me.
In any way as I said if he is serious he should thrive through and learn, an I can bet he already seen GM work; but people always try the shortcut; and there is no shortcut in space art you have to work.
But again sorry if it was to harsh.




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